[english] finalise SOI and ppt

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   In June 2019, the ABC office in Sydney was raided by Australian Federal Police in response to a controversial reportwritten by two of their journalists.\cite{ananian-welsh} This event was shocking and controversial within the country, and especially within the journalism industry. A similar event occurred when the personal home of a \textit{Herald Sun} journalist was searched earlier this year.\cite{mann} Whilst media independence has long been debated, Australia has had little concern given our relatively free society. However, the two incidents this year sparked more discussion and called for the federal government to change their policies.\cite{morris}
 
 
   In June 2019, the ABC office in Sydney was raided by Australian Federal Police in response to a controversial reportwritten by two of their journalists.\cite{ananian-welsh} This event was shocking and controversial within the country, and especially within the journalism industry. A similar event occurred when the personal home of a \textit{Herald Sun} journalist was searched earlier this year.\cite{mann} Whilst media independence has long been debated, Australia has had little concern given our relatively free society. However, the two incidents this year sparked more discussion and called for the federal government to change their policies.\cite{morris}
 

-  In my presentation, I used a variety of persuasive techniques, whilst trying to adopt a calm but passionate tone. By the end of the speech, I wanted to leave listeners feeling empowered but concerned, so I was careful to balance the use of emotionally provocative phrases with objective facts and data. These data included sources such as the United Nations, a commonly revered organisation,\cite{azaoulay} and first-hand quotes from journalists affected by the issue. These credible sources were intended to give my presentation a more professional and well-planned quality, rather than relying on my opinion alone which would be less convincing given the nature of the issue.
+  In my presentation, I used a variety of persuasive techniques, whilst trying to adopt a calm but passionate tone. By the end of the speech, I wanted to leave listeners feeling empowered but concerned, so I was careful to balance the use of emotionally provocative phrases with objective facts and data. These data included sources such as the United Nations, a commonly revered organisation,\cite{azaoulay} and recent first-hand quotes from journalists affected by the issue. These credible sources were intended to give my presentation a more professional and well-planned quality, rather than relying on my opinion alone which would be less convincing given the nature of the issue.

 
   I also used analogies to emphasise the dim future that Australia is at risk of, such as the example of Ukraine.\cite{kyiv} I also recounted the police raids, primarily Annika Smethurst's, in great detail in order to portray the severity of the situation and the fear that these people experienced. The technique of emotional manipulation to install fear was used minimally but was included to broaden the target audience and impact those less easily swayed by logical arguments.
 
 
   I also used analogies to emphasise the dim future that Australia is at risk of, such as the example of Ukraine.\cite{kyiv} I also recounted the police raids, primarily Annika Smethurst's, in great detail in order to portray the severity of the situation and the fear that these people experienced. The technique of emotional manipulation to install fear was used minimally but was included to broaden the target audience and impact those less easily swayed by logical arguments.
 


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       \bibitem{kyiv}
         Sukhov, Oleg; Talant, Bermet (19 October 2018). ``New language law could kill independent media ahead of 2019 elections''. \textit{Kyiv Post} (in Ukrainian).
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         Sukhov, Oleg; Talant, Bermet (19 October 2018). ``New language law could kill independent media ahead of 2019 elections''. \textit{Kyiv Post} (in Ukrainian).
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-        Images used under Creative Commons license from Australian Broadcasting Corporation and Kyiv Post.
+        Images used under Creative Commons license from Public Media Alliance, Kyiv Post, and Associated Press.

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